"You can do it Tuis" shouted the children as the kids ran past hurriedly.
On a exciting but exhausting Friday morning, our school was lining up to get into our teams for Athletics and already teams were chanting.
I was in Tuis-Red team. There were other teams such as Geckos-Green, Kiwis- Yellow and Keas-Blue. Once our team was quiet, we rushed hurriedly to get to the tarpaulins. We were trying to get points for our team by sitting up and folding our arms. We chanted and cheered even if we didn't come First, Second or Third.
To my surprise it was my turn Miss G. had said, "Can we please have the Ten year olds come to the starting line." Nervously I walked to the start of the line, getting ready to run. BOOM! went the blocks in Mrs Poles hands. It went dangling in my ears as I was running as fast as I could. "Yes!"I made it, third place in my Heat! I saw the flag waving in Mrs Poles hand.
The moment had come for the final race. Off we went. I was exhausted when I reached the end. Once again I came Third. I reached the tarpaulins, it was exhausting.
" Yes!" time to announce the winners. Keas once again dominated the others WOW! with a score of 141 points. Once again the bell shrilled a high pitched noise, and we went to buy a lovely BBQ lunch. I deeply sniffed the delicious smell of the BBQ. I was off to play King ball, but once I reached the tennis court I was too late! The bell had shrilled like never before. " HOME TIME!" I yelled as I ran straight to the classroom
It was great to be partof this exhausting and breathtaking experience.
What an exciting day for you Anastasia. Great descriptive language. It really makes your day sound exciting. Remember that's what writing is all about. Painting a picture for the reader so they can tell exactly how you were feeling at the time.
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I like the way you showed some details sis about Atheletics Day. I also like the way your how writing makes sense Ana. By your youngest sister Eden.
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